The Gap

there is a huge gap
between being alone
and being lonely.
You know-
like the gap between
the platform and the tube.
Watch the gap!!

Don't let yourself fall,
don't cross the line.




Poetry by Stine Mari Thomassen
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Written on 2009-10-20 at 14:08

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2009-11-07


Eli The PoetBay support member heart!
Hmmm... I like your text and its "underground" metaphor, but I think I will always be falling, and then getting up again, and falling, and so on. : )
2009-10-20



Ah ha! brilliant.

Smiling at you

Tai, watching her step and skipping the gap
2009-10-20


Rob Graber
Engaging simile!
2009-10-20


Achernar
Oh, I did like this poem, indeed! It made me smile most broadly, and yet it is quite true as well. Loved it!!!
2009-10-20