I don't know what I was thinking when I wrote this... but turned out pretty good/fun ^^

A dip in your soul

I admire the perseverance with which you pursue
I wake up one morning with the grass and it's dew
Back then everything was different, if only I knew...

Surrounded by crimson water
This turned out to be a slaughter
All I did was take one sip
And it sent me on a trip
I wanted to take a dip

A dip in your soul
But I'm drowning
Was this your goal?
Your counting

I cry for help as I draw my last breath
One last time I can see the grass, it's still dewy
You know I'm facing death
But you refuse do throw me a life buoy...

Poetry by Peter
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Written on 2006-03-01 at 19:59

Tags Soul  Death  Life 

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i LOVE the title of this poem :O ... its absolutely breathtaking,and it definitely caught my eye...the poem has an delayed, soothing characteristic about it,and i like the fact that you make it draw out ... 'a dip in your soul...' well done.

Zoya Zaidi
Taht is real powerful write Peter darling, just love it!
Kind of sends shivers down my spine!
xxx, Zoya

Veld Cooper
Very clever 'take a dip..... in your soul'. You are a most talented writer, Peter!