Buying A Last Piece Of Land

. . . his passion

tamed by the tumbling years,

an old voice retelling.

   - John Haines, "Rain Country"

 

 

 

 

Lifted from silt of the stream where it tumbles

Over the edge of a ledge, a smooth flat stone

And on its underside where the water has not

Worn it away is etched the essence of fern-stem

And leaves, hard yet still feathery to the touch,

Still green but now with moss;  how a fragment of

Leaf gone into soft ground became the root of rock

The water took to make the sound of their shared

Story, and soon mine: a few lines etched in stone,

Rain writing me deeper into leaves, into the story

Going on, but no one to hear an old voice retelling. 

 





Poetry by countryfog
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Written on 2015-07-19 at 20:12

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Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
Beautifully rendered, Fog. As William says, such a voice will be heard.
2015-07-21


Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
You write so well of these things. You should be a paleobotanist (if you are not). The observations you make and the way you bring it all to life is wonderful.
2015-07-21



''Rain writing me deeper into leaves'' is a fine line indeed--both melodically and as a powerful image. Rest assured that with a fine poetic voice such as yours there will always be someone around to hear your retellings.
2015-07-20



the way you describe this place makes me sigh with emotion. You are able to transfer your feelings for this place to the reader in an excellent manner. ... sigh ...
2015-07-20



Soon, my friend? :-/
I can only hope the word means something different to you. For as you know, I delight in your stories, the descriptions of your world that bestow such serenity. It's very pleasant to observe the stone with its etching, not only to see but to feel too, through the subtle sensuousness that's always present in how you observe then record nature. There is a beautiful sadness to, 'Rain writing me deeper into leaves'. At BirdBrains we applaud, but in a subdued manner.
2015-07-20



Well I'm listening. It sounds like you have experience of storytelling, you pull the reader in leaving them wanting more.
2015-07-19