Shooting stars are beautiful, and yet they are disturbing...


SHOOTING STAR

Whenever I see a shooting star
Ricochet out of its orbit,
Pierce the pitch-black bosom
Of the gloomy night,
Leave behind a silvery trail
On the face of sky,

Strange stirring it evokes
Deep inside my soul,

Questions of bizarre nature
Rake up in my mind:

Is it the escape of star
From its daily drudge?

Or is it the beginning of
Another eternal grudge?

Will it just integrate
Slowly,
Gradually,
Into space?

And
Be
No more.

When I see a shooting star,
It stirs me to the core.


Author: Zoya Zaidi
Aligarh (UP), India
Copyright : Zoya Zaidi




Poetry by Zoya Zaidi
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Written on 2005-10-04 at 19:37

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Dan Cederholm
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Hey Zoya this is a lovely poem!!!

The stars and cosmos is so amuzing to

think about and look at!!!

I am often dreaming away surrounding by

planets and stars, then I think about our

mortal bodies and immortal souls!

Regards and hugs Dan!!!

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2006-09-16


Sandy Hiss
This is really beautiful Zoya. I've never thought about shooting stars much but your poem has made think of them in a different light.
2006-07-13


Zachary P. B.
That was beautiful. Very inspiring. I like how we wrote on the same thing, but through our different eyes we describe it differently. It is the awesomeness of humanity. Good job again.
2006-07-13


Marie
I love this one...it's true, one thing can have two very opposite consequences...try to to think too much about it :)))
2006-01-10


BlueyedSoul
Yes, shooting stars are a wonder to me also Zoya....almost sad to see, yet so beautiful and not at all ordinary. It is like they are spent, no more, a blaze of beauty that has ended its life, and is no more...somewhat makes me think of a life taken too soon....odd that it makes us feel such things heh? Maybe just a reminder to us of such sacred things as life and death.

oh...and such a beautiful poem to express these ponderings.

Love, BlueyedSoul
2005-12-05


Teala
Isn't it good to have wonder in your heart, loving the beautiful wonders of the world. I love this poem.
2005-10-12


F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
hi zoya zaidi... thanks for leaving me words... i appreciate it very much... xx

your poem:
i think ive seen a shooting star once but it was a fleeting moment really... stars mystify... and shooting stars even more... i dont know much about astronomy so cant say i know why there are shooting stars once in a while... about what it invokes in you, is it related to regional folklore or simply your personal observations on this phenomenon? i know i ask the strangest questions sometimes hehe... though i have to say your poem made me see a different perspective id never pondered upon before... i like that :) thanks for sharing this... im off into my thoughts about shooting stars... and im sure if i ever see another one, ill be thinking of you :)

later... xx
2005-10-10



towards. Not "rowards" :)
2005-10-08



A very beautifully expressed reflection.
We humans stand with our feet on the ground and our head rowards the sky...
2005-10-08


Sofiul Azam
Another good impressive poem ... Anyway, what do you wish to have straight off whenever you see a shooting star? As you are an Indian, I can't but ask you this question which you may think to be odd.
2005-10-08


jacy
very wonderful poem. makes you want to sit and be still and just wonder about these types of things. i've noticed on your poetry page, you've only got 3 poems, please post some more as i would love to read some more of your work :)
2005-10-07


epohonci
shooting stars are ok. shooting people (bang bang, i don't mean lol)/shooting stars that are people... are what get to me. this is really good. :)
2005-10-05


Ray
Very good thought. Write it as you feel it. Never thought at looking at the stars this way. Keep it up.
2005-10-05


Zoya Zaidi
Thanks casingtheday,I nticed that as soon as I posted.I was cerrecting it but you got there before me. Smart! Keep it up.
2005-10-04


AmonTheDark
i liked the poem i found
it to be a good text t read
2005-10-04


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
you are missing an n in the title inside the poem.

the word orbit i think would be better with a lower case o.

the first verse, i know you leave it open for continuation, but you begin to explore a thought, but do not follow through with anything at all, just when i see, and leave it at that. perhaps removing the ... here, use a comma and then go into the next two lines?

star capitlised i don't think it need it.

Or
It will just integrate
Slowly,
Gradually,
Into space?


will it just...

plus the following three lines are a continuation of the ones before so you do not need the 2 question marks.
2005-10-04