Lock and Key

amid the velvet corridors
where shadows cut to pieces dreams
behind safe doors of corduroy
light crack sifts the solid beams
there tucked within one curtained room
you sit recoiled in vacant gloom
surrounded by blue damask walls
you languid lie as sunset falls
as fingers trace rose silken lips
the windows scratched by bare branch whips
and listening to this song of thieves
you fight to find a way to breathe
where wrapped in layers of prickly wool
and imagined dreams of lace and tulle
pretending there what was to be
as you softly weep under lock and key

Poetry by BlueyedSoul
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Written on 2007-02-15 at 03:20

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Winston Latanafrancia Soldevilla
Although your writing here is a bit blue
Sorrowful expressions most especially are true.
What struck me most when I read your lines
are the mesmerizing words in rhyming signs.
Picturesque indeed,
In which case I may proceed.
Lock and Key? Quite a symbolic representation
of a close and open situation.
In which case I would rather say
It's up to us, to you, to choose. "Night or Day?!"

This one truly moved me sweetie pumpkin, great write!!!

Rik The PoetBay support member heart!
What a fantastic piece of poetry. Not sure there is much else to say really. :-)

Colin Skilton
Your last poem revealed your romantic side Pretty Lady.
With this one is a sadness that crawls across the sky and hides your tears in its darkness and the room holds the dark emotions you feel. The harsh cold day turns the delicate side of your nature inside and your broken heart bleeds and makes us all share in its sadness.
This is so good but very sad and i hope it is not written from experience. There is always light at the end of a tunnel, nature dictates that this is so, but sometimes when the world kicks us in the teeth we care not to see it.
May the light of love always shine in your heart.

the last line just beautiful
i loved the poem

Karen Canning
full of depth and emotions, I really love the ending, you pen excellent poetry

karen xx

lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
now then Kitten as
you write more and more you get better and better thisis surely a winner in the realm of any poetry well done

meow! meow!

rgds Michael

letting sorrow come to us and live through it ... you have for me painted this picture for me ... the sorrow that comes now and then in our .lives..as I have experienced it ..when we transcend from one part of our life to another ..

a very beautiful write

wishing you a beautiful thursday

Kathy Lockhart
Wow Blue...this is outstanding. It is full of emotion, textures, and imagery. Your break has resulted in a creativity explosion.

betsy Firefly
A sad and honest, well-written poem!

F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
the descriptions are just fabulous in this... i like the mood the short lines, and the vivid imagery of the words create... this was really good to read... thanks :f *hug* xx

Rob Graber
"tucked within one curtained room
you sit recoiled in vacant gloom"

Lines of haunting beauty here and throughout...
Fantastic write, blue!

that was one of the most descriptive, incredible things i've ever read. it wasn't just words.