The ramblings of the first one to watch and copy the raven's practical nature.

This is the first version, will most likely revise it several times before I'm in any way satisfied :)

Edit: fixed some tense discrepansies.

Sonnet 8 (The Wanderer's thoughts)

I've talked with those of you who worship me,
A silly thing, though fitting none the less.
There is a certain perfect irony;
His children pity me and my distress!
I've wandered aimlessly through time and space,
To some I've granted life, a drop, no more;
Results have varied: some discovered grace,
While others turned to blood and gore galore.
For centuries I've trudged through sin and worse,
And though I was the first to stain the earth,
Did I deserve this never ending curse?
It was His proudest one who gave Death birth!
I slew and buried Abel in the mud:
My name is Cain; I bear the mark of Blood.

Sonnet by Thomas Selnes The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2008-02-28 at 02:07

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betsy Firefly
Thomas - Så flott et dikt! Du er begavet- virkelig.

Jeg har vært syk lenge, men ennå en gang oppegående igjen. Hvordan har du det?

aina (Betsy Firefly)

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Emelén The PoetBay support member heart!
my Sir, this is grandiose.
Again you leave me
mouth open

liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
A beautiful flow
and rhyme, like
a gentle tide ebbing
to and fro.

I've never been a
big fan of sonnets,
but this grabs me.


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betsy Firefly
Perfect in rhythmn and rhyme!

Not quite sure I grasped it fully; if I did - I'm not sure I agree.

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I think this is excellent and very thought provoking and would change not one word of it.

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Well, nothing is ever so perfect that it can't be made even more perfect. But, now, I wonder if anything at all could, or ought to, be changed in this beautifully crafted text.
Thanks for giving it to us: indeed a most pleasant reading!

on a scale from 1 to 10 this one should get an 11...aside the form of sonnet, which, in the end, is simply a form (no matter if difficult or easy to use), i admit being captivated by the fluency of the monologue...and especially by the conclusion...the word "beautiful" wouldn't do justice to this...and "interesting" would sound like a cliche...allow me more time please to invent a proper epithet for it!
Lilly xxx

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Kathy Lockhart
This is brilliant! It is one that I shall bookmark for it truly chilled me and warmed me to leave me in awe of its powerful emotional grasp.

Rob Graber
What a fine sonnet this is! Among its many fine phrases, "gore galore" I find especially apt.