I wanted to write a lovely
love poem and this came out,
not sure if it needs another stanza???

~L.~



An Unromantic Love Poem




Perverting, twisting, warping
delusions of grandeur invades
just to listen to your talking
the intellect brain, silently, fades,

Yet such a delicious, gentle lover
you are, when you're not acting like a king
but when you don't listen to your other
such a low of sadness you bring,

One can't help, but to you be drawn
it's a meeting tinged with dread,
once in, a heart becomes torn,
bleeding, abused, it's caught in your web,

Sensual words fall from your tongue
convincing stars that night is day,
in a feathered chain one can not run,
yet the heart surrenders in a willing way.




Poetry by liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2009-06-18 at 15:53

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Kathy Lockhart
I believe the poem is just as it should be ending with the last stanza. You have used vivid imagery to pull the reader into the poem's/ writer's emotions. Kathy
2009-06-19


Mr.Mist
A twisted, mind"bending" write!
But in a good way..It cought me..
Love can do so much to us,
and we let it do it to us..

Bookmarked ;o)

-m
2009-06-18


Winston Latanafrancia Soldevilla
It is like falling in love again. How sweet this is? Thanks for sharing my friend. Its been a long time. How's everything?
2009-06-18