If Lady Izumi Had Written An Etheree

 

  For John, with thanks for the inspiration of a new form

 

 

 

tears

wetting

the inkstone

but no words come

in another night

of a long lonely year

spent looking beyond the path

through the garden to the closed gate

where he had stopped and turned a last time

to her tears and dew on the plum blossoms

 





Poetry by countryfog
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Written on 2015-07-21 at 04:43

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Kathy Lockhart
this is amazing work and so beautiful! Outstanding!! applause!!
2016-07-08



This is a joy to read, my friend :-)
I recall the name Lady Izumi from others of your poems and I've made a mental note to read up on her, once Ms Bird schedules reading time. I love the sequence of images here, especially the final 'plum blossoms' that pleases my eyes and ears. Applause!
2015-07-23


Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
Quite brilliant and so refreshing. I love the last line. It gives the piece an existential realism.
2015-07-23


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2015-07-22


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
Bravo, Fog. I hadn't heard of this form until today. It looks terribly confining to me, but you've wrung a very nice poem out of it.
2015-07-21



A pleasing wedge of lovely, moving words. An amazing union of an Eastern theme with an unusual form.
2015-07-21


John Ashleigh
A gem of a poem. You have done the form justice. It is picturesque, articulate, and emotional. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Regards,
John.
2015-07-21



Bravo!! I am liking this form! Beautiful poem

When I am out of the hospital I want to try this!
Ashe
2015-07-21