well you'll undrstnd this poem , if you resolve the inversion in it , the line "can i comment" actually means "i can comment".


you're only mine



The clothes you wear,
The thoughts you share.

On all these aspects can I comment.

The way you walk,
The way you walk.

On all these aspects can I comment.

The way you laugh,
The way you cry.
The way you give up,
The way you try.

On all these aspects can I comment.

The way you take,
Truth or fake,
Fast asleep or awake.

On all these aspects can I comment.

All the moments that came and went,
All the time that we have spent.

on all these aspects can i comment.

but when on all these aspects i comment,
not even a single time do i repent,
coz for others you may be shine,
Coz for others you may be Devine,
But on top of all,

"You are only mine"




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Poetry by zeeshan
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Written on 2006-08-30 at 12:45

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Michael G
very nice indeed! i like the way this plays out
2006-08-30


seda
wowwwww ,
a perfect text
2006-08-30



Can I comment?..well this is lovely ...well done!!!!kissess
2006-08-30