Sounds quite unfinished, I know...trust me, it's intentional. =)


Sketches of Summer

sweet uncertainty

you radiate this
you and your quiet
honeysuckle smile

we lie on the brink of
mutual destruction
limbs haphazardly strewn in a
carefully careless configuration
fooling no one

or we wouldn't be
except there is no one to fool

just the trees
and five-leafed vines
vengeful grass shoots

you
and me

and sweet uncertainty...





Words by PoeticProcrastination
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Written on 2009-06-12 at 20:19

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Eli The PoetBay support member heart!
You certainly don't have your head in the clouds.

Thank You for this very thoughtful piece of writing.
2011-03-02


Nick Matherne
This is really

Simply beautiful and
Wonderful. It
Entreats the mind to
Envision a scene and
The situation that are all part of the great message

I really like this. It is very expressive.

I like how your tone really effectively matches the last line.
Uncertainty is a word that is too long to accrosicize but very well describes all of this

YAY POEM! -Nick
2009-06-15


Morgan Cellohead
Yes, this about sums it up - i'm not sure what to make of your use of the word "sweet", though it certainly gives the poem a very interesting tone, and implies a very interesting take on the situation... I love the "carefully careless configuration fooling no one" - so true, so true. You have successfully conveyed a lot of what i'll simply call "things" in this poem, and you've done it very well - congratulations. And no - it's not finished. : )
2009-06-12