Parnika

2010-05-27
Beautiful.

2008-03-10
dyu mean love or lover?

2008-03-10
i think ppl dont comment on texts like this cos it leaves them speechless...dint want to be one of those ppl..

2008-03-10
and "I believe"?
other than that its an interesting thought..good imagery..

2008-03-10
shouldn't it be "become moonless"?

2007-07-08
I wanted to take a few lines out to tell u where u best captured the emotion but every single line is so full of it, I'd have to copy the whole poem!
Well done.
hope to see more

2007-05-20
Na..me no like..me no understand! me dumb....u go on..write smt simple...soon!

2007-05-20
OOOOOOOOOOO! it rises and falls with perfect form!
Yay! I truly am inspiring!

2007-05-20
hmmm..nostalgic this one..twisted towards the end..nice!

2007-05-17
Hi sheko!
I remember when i was new I was blown over by everything and everyone on this site...There is some truly amazing talent here...but that shouldn't scare u..I'm sure ur as brilliant it's just that sharing poetry is not as easy at it seems, especially online cos u never know who'll see it and what they would think. But be brave, be expressive, be yourself and most of all be sincere.
Can't wait to see ur work
Parnika

2007-04-28
Perfect!!

2007-03-19
if u are so sure its "fire"
You wouldn't be demure

2007-03-19
I'm on the same quest too!
"I want to know you inside out"--Bryan Adams
I often wish everyone's mind was an open book so that I could know who they really are...sometimes i feel my life is too much of an open book...
But i'm touched by ppl who want to know the real me
Thank you
Excellent poem!
absolutely perfect
bookmarked!

2007-03-16
disappointed with the end..sorry

2007-03-03
I'm still amazed at the way u are able to say so much in so few words!

2007-03-03
LOL...when i began reading it i thought id copy a few magnificently descriptive lines and comment on them...but then I realised I'd have to copy the whole impeccable little poem!!
great job!
ur back!
this one flows like calvins runny nose when he's faking a cold!!
hehe...love ya!
and no, this is not gonnna make me return ur essential calvin and hobbes volume any sooner!! hehe..evil grin!!

2007-03-03
Umm..something is wrong..cant quite put my finger on it..ya..maybe its the flow..its not very smooth..more like a paragraph than a poem in some places...but subject-matter- wise..I like the last lines..

2007-02-22
some parts of it remind me of me..and some parts of a friend for whom I am trying to be the light..i know it's not easy to shine..when he's down he brings me down..but I try..
The best part is as u said I'm his equal his friend and it works both ways..he's my light when i'm dark...
By the way, thank you for your comments on Beauty, you definately have IT

2007-02-22
"What is this life so full of care
There is no time to stand and stare"
From Liesure by HW longfellow
May not be the exact words but u get the picture...
I've always been ridiculed for being an amazingly slow eater...
It's better to be a dreamer than a superficial, hollow faat paced modern man...

2007-02-22
just the other day..I was thinking along the same lines
ppl are crowned Miss universe or put in the book of world records everyday...hasn't anyone stopped to think that there can never be one mopst beautiful lady in the world (even if beauty could be measured) same goes for th nobel prize..just because they have been recognised doesn't mean they are the best..
Thank you for putting in words what i have believed for so long..

2007-02-22
This reminds me of a song which says
"If everyone cared and nobody cried
If everyone loved and nobody lied
If everyone shared and swallowed their pride
We'd see the day that nobody died"

Yes, if all poetry writers were poets we'd gain so much and lose so little
Dont agree with tai chi when she says if only poets would write things we understand...not everyone writes to be understood..
Anyway, nice piece..make it a song..

2007-02-20
The consoling SHAR
Haven't met her myself but I know she exists..
There now I have successfully commented on all your poems!

2007-02-20
it's not necessarily the bad kind...u just have to decide who holds the reins..if not u..who?
were u externally motivated in the locus of control experiment we did?

2007-02-20
U've personified a feeling!
Good job!
aND NO..i DON'T THINK IT'S DREAD...when i feel like that I usually interpret it as excitement...it could be anyhting really...almost any intense feeling can be described with this poem....

2007-02-20
Again this is signiture SHAR work!
the truth..as plain and simple as it can get!

2007-02-20
This text proves that there is such a thing as positive criticism!

2007-02-20
This is so SHAR!

2007-02-18
Yes I do believe in dreams!

2007-02-17
was listening to this song recently and every syllable makes sense..i don't care if my friends make fun of me..I love Bryan Adams!

2007-02-16
The institution of marriage has become a reproduction of childhood dreams of perfection instead of a lifetime promise of commitment..why do ppl get married this way if they don't believe in god?, I wonder...

2007-02-15
:) When you said "my thoughts hop around like a bee in a flower garden. I didn't know where I was going; I just went." I knew this poem was for me..cos thats what I do...of course ur ambling words fit in perfectly unlike some of mine..

2007-02-15
It must hurt to hear someone say "Good Job" to a poem born out of pain. so , I'm not saying anything..but I feel it!
Hugs to ment the broken heart
Love Parnika

2007-02-15
It seems hypocritical to say I know what you feel..but I really do..
I used to live in the past and kill my dreams too...until I realised regret is the worst thing one can ever do...don't hurt yourself..you know it's better to live in the moment..so try it...let go of the past..dare to dream about the future and live just this moment...

2007-02-15
Painfully truthful u are!
And u know urself very well!
Helmet Hug!

2007-02-15
Sigh..do you need to?

2007-02-12
The poem is immaculate..left my mouth open
but don't make promises you can't keep..U'll end up getting hurt.

2007-02-12
I love the way you say these simple things...my dad taught me to say 'good night I love you' every night and it works..no matter how bad the day..the night can bring rest comfort hopes and dreams which will be cherished forever.
Good one.
parnika

2007-02-08
Identify with this!

2007-02-08
*mouth wide open speechlessly*
How can u put it more precisely, more stikingly?!!
Thought it was another half-romantic snow stories..how wrong I was..that last line gives me chills...Hug out the cold, Love Parnika

2007-02-05
shouldn't it be "conquered"?
otherwise it's great..

2007-02-05
Very powerful
"Feed me courage" has great imagery!

"I can't make promises for tomorrow
But nobody's gonna love you more
Than the way that i wanted to

I want you, I need you
Let me love you
Believe me, just trust me
Then love me "
We have a lot in common!

2007-02-02
found some grammatical errors. U must have been feeling real hard while writing this..I felt the first few lines..I'm sort of in the same boat..by the end of it tho u lost me.

2007-01-11
Awwww!! don't u hate it when they do tht...simple theme..brilliant poem!

2007-01-11
OOOO! I love the march of the penguins..this is an excellent poem!! *bookmarked* I'm gonna send it to alll my friends..u write b'fully!!

2007-01-04
it's like a snap shot out of life..I like the description..very true..

2007-01-03
Why is it called murder?
Otherwise its a beautiful piece..

2006-11-10
Surprising end...love it!

2006-10-31
Just proves the mind is the best camera ever!

2006-10-28
I love the lines They know when I'm hurt and they know what to do" these are the best kind of friends. My friends know that they should just stand by in silence without questioning me when I am depressed and I'm thankful for that..

2006-10-28
"just feeling and rhyme" that's all there is to it..I've always said writing poetry is 1% perspiration 99% inspiration...get inspired and write on..