Inspired by a friend in need

While I Saw you Cry

While I saw you cry

I saw the tears upon your face

A look of pain and heartbreak

No flower can replace

While I saw you cry

I felt the pain of lies; despair

You felt so alone in this world of many

Who were they to care

While I saw you cry

My own heart broke in two

When thoes who smile betray

You feel there's nothing you can do

When at last I saw you smile

I felt my own spirit rise that day

To see love return to thoes how've fallen

Makes your friendship all the while

Poetry by Coolaaron88
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Written on 2007-03-05 at 05:55

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how much have you experience in your short life
do you write of personal experience
because this is beautifull

When i first read this, i tryed not to think about the fact that you are just 17. I thought it was amazing, and even more amazing coming from a 17 year old. Keep up the good work.

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Gloria Beya
Really great poem you nearlly got me in tears there too. I love how your feelings can be felt by the readers.Lovely.

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Amanda K
what a delicate poem. full of care and love.

all the best

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