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The latest comments that MetaPoetics has written.

Back in the Day

2021-11-05
Such beautiful and memorable fragments from your youth. It made me remind me of my own childhood, back in the day when everything and everyone seemed carefree and picture-perfect. A delight to read, your poem; thanks for posting!


Funny

2021-11-05
The bitter reality of modern-day Western society. You've expressed the sentiment well, Larry!


dear diary

2021-11-05
I enjoyed reading your poetic diary. It's full of life and day-to-day musings. A wholesome treat for the readers! :)


TO CRY

2021-10-20
Words of the wise, Ken!


COP26

2021-10-20
We might . . . but will such change ever arrive?


Yarn

2021-10-20
Touche!


Digital Clock

2021-10-20
This is sweet and beautiful.


The little spider

2021-10-20
I like how you've connected the "spider" conceit with yourself. I'm sure many can relate to the end, and yes, "being alone's not too scary" too! Nicely written!


Language

2021-10-18
This meta-poem is a delight to read. Nicely done!


Need

2021-10-10
Coffee and poems! The best things anyone can have!


look ahead

2021-10-10
So many fine lines to cherish here, so many resonating sentiments to adore. I especially like the part with "there is something / within us that abhors isolation." So very true, as humans need "to touch and be touched." A well-crafted work, as always!


What Hilary Told Me

2021-10-10
I'll take heed to Hilary's advice. Thanks!


First Flurry

2021-10-07
A picturesque description of a flurry of snowfall. Nicely done!


Taking Control

2021-10-07
Beautiful! A reminder to "take control" and "remain calm" during these troubling times!


Death

2021-10-04
Grotesque . . . but a truth well-expressed!


Leave this chanting and singing

2021-10-04
Words of wisdom and prayer!

Tagore's "Gitanjali" is an old favorite. Thanks for posting the poem!


Someone I Knew Back When

2021-10-04
Fundygelicals? Fundamentalist evangelicals? Nice word!

I also like "shrill white salvation" for its sonic effects!


Haiku

2021-09-29
Perfect!


Sp e e e e e.......d

2021-09-18
True words, sir.


So Slow to Slumber

2021-09-18
There's so much to cherish here. A well-crafted villanelle and the continuous strings of /s/ sound is a delight to hear.


A Pair of Trees

2021-09-15
Nicely done! A well-writ rondel.


Art

2021-09-13
This is very interesting . . . and quaint. I especially like the third stanza as I can relate to it more. Thank you for introducing us to the poetry of Francis Adams.


Oh I do like to be beside the seaside

2021-09-13
This is very beautiful and dreamlike. Thank you for an enjoyable read.


The Day-Dream

2021-09-13
A beautiful poem, and an elegant work of ekphrasis. There are so many fine nuances to cherish in the poem, and I especially like the alliterative word pairs.


LET THE MUSIC SWING

2021-09-08
Music is indeed a cure to the soul's affliction. Wise words, Ken.


A MIND IS A TERRIBLE THING TO WAIST

2021-09-07
Very amusing!

I especially like the playful nature of the poem, and the interior monologue that goes back-and-forth works really well.

Overall, nicely done!



Dreamland

2021-09-07
I agree with Jim and Lawrence. Tremendous growth in poetic voice and skills! :)

The angsty teenage voice is now mature and reflective. And I think all poets mature differently, but there's a common thought here: "a sense of alienation stemmed from immaturity / mixed with overconfidence."

Haven't we all been through that, eh?


Lines Written As A School Exercise

2021-09-06
I second Lawrence. Beautiful yet seemingly dry for us 21st-century readers. Nonetheless, there's something so charming about Wordsworth and Coleridge, and I find their verses very comforting!

Thanks for posting,


The Fish

2021-09-04
Lovely conceit! Bravo!


in the beginning

2021-09-04
You start the poem with a pre-big-bang like emptiness and end it with a somewhat grotesque image of returning into the womb -- very captivating throughout!

Look forward to reading more of your works. Missed PoetBay so much, but glad to be back!


Fragment: A Tale Untold

2021-06-07
Beautiful. Thanks for posting!


June Capers

2021-06-06
Well writ!


Whisper

2021-06-06
A villanelle? I adore the two refrain lines very much. Sweet and gentle. A beautiful love poem indeed. :)


Haiku - Morning light

2020-10-29
How beautiful. :)


Heavenly haiku

2020-08-18
how very charming!


tea leaves

2020-08-18
this is a lovely poem about reading the tea leaves. never thought about tea leaves telling so many stories before. that conceit is charming and particularly effective.


WITH SUPISHES MINDS

2020-08-14
Wise words, Ken. :)


one day

2020-08-14
Sweet and beautiful. With its gentle and unhurried delight, a bossa nova of a poem indeed. :)


girl crazy

2020-08-14
This freestyle ghazal was a delightful read. I like the refrain "now she's gone" and how it reinforces the meaning each time.


Ramblings 515

2020-06-07
This "rambling" can easily be connected to the larger political picture, especially to what's happening around the globe. I like the use of the elephant as a symbol in the poem.


han shan

2020-02-24
Wasn't it a self-imposed exile? I was under the impression that Han Shan chose his solitude, or maybe it was the solitude that chose him? Loneliness, hmm? That's an interesting perspective.


kites

2020-02-13
I like the way the poem progresses from the tangible to the intangible. The progression is steady and revealing.


clarity revisited

2020-02-13
Visiting old poems can be a disturbing experience. But I like what you wrote in one of your earlier works: "let the images speak for themselves." That's a piece of great writing advice.


Sunrise

2020-01-23
Beautiful work! And welcome to Poetbay. :)


listen

2020-01-23
The repetitions actually work well. They give a Zen-like feel to the poem. Readers are urged to listen . . . intently . . . as the stanzas unfurl.


A Blossoming Hope

2020-01-21
I like the idea of finding hope in simple objects. Poets need inspiration, and that may come in bits and pieces. I am happy that the "pot of clay" acted as a poetic impetus to you. :)


Snow

2020-01-19
Beautiful!


orchestrations (pantoum challenge)

2020-01-19
You indeed record the events around and tell us a beautiful story, even when writing in a closed-form. I especially like the subtle differences you make when repeating the same line in the next stanza.


Climate Change

2020-01-13
Sums up about winter. This pantoum is a joy to read.


Insanity, Sane? Pantoum Challenge

2020-01-13
I like this pantoum very much. It kind of feels like an interesting wordplay, the way lines repeat themselves with some subtle differences.