| Is There an Elephant in the Room? Oh, no, Just a Lot of Manure and Broken Furniture
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2022-08-09
Sobering Lawrence. Where will it end - civil war?
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| Coach driver's lament
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2022-08-08
Oh! Scary last line Alan, you got me then.
Dougie
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| Wine and Whine
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2022-08-08
Pareidolia! I had to look it up - nice one Allen. But to the poem; I loved it; taking me back to my misspent youth (in truth still at it); and the nights on weed and wine in Sydney; this evoked all our daft days but so beautifully - bravo Sameen!
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| Behind the voice of mind
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2022-08-08
'Behind the voice of mind is the joy of simplicity to find' The finding of non-self in silence.
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| I'M AS MAD AS MARCH HAIR - AND IT'S AUGUST!
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2022-08-08
Best for us - sharing what's the good and not the negative we find. Nice one Ken
Dougie
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| AS I WALK - TRAVAL ON THE LOOP
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2022-08-08
One of your best Ken - to me at least. There's an easy rhythm to the lines, carrying me along and the message is spot on!
Dougie
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| Midnight Rain
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2022-08-08
This is good - damn good. Quite apart from the rhyming sequence - which always appeals to me - there is this powerful unfolding of the story with the repetitive questioning - a very effective device.
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| Of Course
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2022-08-08
Reverse mirror of tragedy
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| The Bat in the Attic
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2022-08-08
Perfect Lawrence; and I liked the bat in the attic simile. Also, I like your conversational flow in your work - deceptive because there is the end stop - silently alone.
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| Montrésor
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2022-08-06
What a delightful poem. I liked its ambiguity (to me at least), that are we looking at a painting? Or the lovers painting? The last stanza is for me perfect.
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| Senryu: August
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2022-08-06
A good Senryu - well done!
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| children are resilient
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2022-08-06
There is so much here; not only the descriptive but also the underlying conflict between the person now, and the younger self. I liked the manner in which the reader needs to work into the poems meaning; a damn good poem - Bravo!
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| MORNINGS WITH MY MOTHER
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2022-08-06
Childhood suffering - and how a child can suffer! That suffering can be the manure, out of which the red rose of poetry grows.
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| Suzanne
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2022-08-05
A sweetly nostalgic love poem. I like the way it flows in a subtlety conversation tone. Nice one Lawrence
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| Some Mock Turtle (AIW, Lewis Carroll),
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2022-08-05
More! More!
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| A READER WHO DID NOT INFACK READ
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2022-08-04
I'd say they were missing the point of the poem Ken; and well put!
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| A Sweet Song
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2022-08-04
I enjoyed the rhythm of this work, and your use of imagery.
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| you better know
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2022-08-03
Oops. I was looking away.
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| Forgive Me for not Having Had You Over
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2022-08-03
And haven't we all been there - in some form or other? At least ours was a rental property, that is now being refurbished at huge cost after the 'tenants' wrecked it.
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| Grotesque
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2022-08-03
Well nailed Lawrence! The hypocrisy and double standards of nations seeking only their own self-interest.
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| 02128
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2022-08-03
Excellent as always Thomas; I particularly enjoyed the rhyme sequence, not to mention the evocation of younger days: "older women aged thirteen" is perfect. Bravo!
Dougie
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| Nonsense Masquerading as Social Commentary
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2022-08-03
More like social commentary masquerading as poetry Lawrence. I liked the imagery you evoke of our brave new world; keep on paddling friend.
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| NO MORE SMILES AT EVENSONG
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2022-08-03
A poem and a story; a skill you use in abundance; it carried me along to the final twist. Bravo Allen
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| MY LOVELY WIFE
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2022-08-03
A tender poem Alan, that co conveys so much in a subtle way.
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| abnormality
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2022-07-28
I like this; it demands so much from so little, in that it makes me think.
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| DOUBLE ENTENDRES
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2022-07-26
Well Alan, you old scallywag you've done it again - danced with language to both entertain and provoke thought. As to Gay, I only found out recently it means to some 'Good As You'. My dear departed father in law used to say - watch out for them Gay Gordons, when we went Scottish country dancing.
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| mirror monologue
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2022-07-26
"but I know that at the first ledge you find,
you will throw yourself off instead of trying"
This is good - damn good; sums up the manner in which we try to urge ourselves on to better things - Bravo!
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| The Sphinx and The Ants
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2022-07-25
Hopefully, to abide, establish a colony, and over time undermine that arrogant stone idol, and send it crashing into the sand.
Long live the ants!
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| FEATHERED FRIENDS
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2022-07-25
Naughty, but nice!
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| The Weight of Memories
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2022-07-25
I thought it brought the memories into a reconciliation; as well as the ones we would not want are the ones that we cherish; and we can't have the one without the other. A good poem.
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| Gone
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2022-07-25
What an evocation of your muse! It seems clear that you are in full communion with yours, so keep running friend.
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| produce
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2022-07-25
Jim, this is good, it took me along and I could imagine how a child might see things, and how the world becomes real in the taste of a peach; spare in it's composition but a lot of meaning here.
Bravo!
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| D. G. Rossetti and the Hokey-Pokey
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2022-07-25
Well! This may be a parody, but such skill in it's execution denotes a lucid talent.....methinks!
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| THE SAFETY OF THE PINE FOREST
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2022-07-25
If I may say, an excellent poem. I particularly liked the way you've married a modern form of betrayal to an ageless style.
Bravo Allen
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| COLOURS - FOR YOUR BIRTHDAY
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2022-07-24
As always Allen - delight to read and ponder. And how blessed we are to find a soul mate - like Linda.
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| A walking stick
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2022-07-01
I liked this poem Mick. I feel that you have summed up how so many of us relate (or not) to our faith.
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| TO HAVE EXSTA SKINS
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2022-06-29
Ken, you have, as usual, nailed the issue. And may I say how much I appreciate you comment (sole until Griffoner) comment on my Second Skin, which I feel is related; it makes me think I may be waiting my time in commenting on others work.
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| I WORDARATE I VERSERAITE
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2022-06-26
So true Ken; English, as we know it, is a fairly recent fixed form.
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| GLASSES
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2022-06-26
Nice one Alan; I enjoyed the play on words.
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| [19 May] - Terms of Membership | Reminder on Solicitation
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2022-05-22
Hi Editorial team
"Being asked to join another website, etc."
Could you please clarify this? As you'll know some us are and have been members on other poetry sites. While commenting on a members work it is possible that the mention of another site occurs; for example "I have posted this previously on ........."And if this leads to the recipient looking at the other site, does this constitute soliciting?
Personally, I would not wish to encourage another member to forsake PoetBay; but it is also the prerogative of members as to where they both browse and post - surely? I would be most grateful if you could respond on this.
And keep up the good work.........Dougie
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| 3rd
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2022-05-20
And wasn't bronze the metal of Achilles shield?
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| Until We Unleash Them
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2022-05-20
I well recall that image; and what struck me was that he dived - he did not fall. BTW, a small typo - or should be our maybe?
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| RETURN...
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2022-05-18
I'm still taking this in - more readings and letting it settle; but already it rings true for me; and I liked the urgency here - a call to understand and be one. So yes - Bravo!
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| MUSIC & SONGS
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2022-05-18
And I've never heard of anyone being executed by cello;
or, sprayed by violins; or had a trombone take out their position. Too right Ken!
I feel a poem coming on!!
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| The Present Is a Vacant Room Between Your Heartbeats
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2022-05-18
I liked the use of language that evokes the state of mind - almost like a stream of consciousness, but with an underlying skill that carries it effortlessly; then a coming back to ground with the cat on the lap.
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| THINKING BACK
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2022-05-18
A good poem, blended with a riveting story; and as Allen said - idiots!!
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| Moments
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2022-05-08
It took me a moment to realise - Whip-poor-will - the bird. And then the description of the day about to begin; the poem works well for me.
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| this time and place
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2022-05-08
A nice evocation of the landscape as seen through your eyes.
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| delphic storm
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2022-05-08
I liked the reference to the Odyssey, and is it Odysseus talking here? Or is it that we are all Odysseus? There is a unsettling mood in the poem, that fit's in with the portents - nice one.
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| tall reeds
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2022-05-08
I can't see how this could be put in any other form; it's so well put Tom; and our love to your Dad.
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