| I DON"T MUCH LIKE THE RAIN
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2023-12-04
I was with you all the way, Allen, felt and heard and saw as you did. Such vivid writing!
I see nostalgia two ways: be sad because what was will never happen again; be glad because it happened!
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| agent double
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2023-12-04
i guess the question is to be a patsy
or true to oneself
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| How you know?
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2023-12-03
that's how. that's right!
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| Poem
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2023-12-03
i have read your poetry long enough to see the excellence of your writing, your skill as a writer. i see that in this poem, and the sadness and longing of which you write.
i hope the sadness passes. moon and stars speak of solitude, fear and longing . . . real pain, but also speak of joy and well-being.
sometimes you have accept, and live with, the darker muse.
good poem, for sure.
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| Notes from Spencer
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2023-12-03
Amazing how many images you've created that create an entire scenario in my imagination. Also, the peace you felt, and your happiness to be there, radiates from each short poem. I imagine the rope-pulling was a moment of intense joy.
This form suits you to a "t".
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| HOSPITAL DAYS - 2
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2023-12-03
Again, a great poem because it simply and clearly expresses something real and true.
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| HOSPITAL DAYS - 1
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2023-12-02
this is a great poem, and a tough, tough subject ~
wishing you well ~~~
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| Reverie
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2023-12-02
i read this listening to Coldplay
your words and the music as one
lovely, beautiful, inviting imagery here
so glad you posted this here ~~~
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| TOTAL ~~~ CONTROL
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2023-12-02
the first time i read this i thought you had written:
There is nothing,
absolutely n o t h i n g,
that
M O T H E R N A T U R E
*can* teach you.
and i thought ~ really? thankfully i reread it and saw where i misread "cant" for "can," and i'm so relieved b/c this seems very true to me monsieur kyreus of sweden~
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| My Miracle
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2023-12-02
i read this, then read it again, went deep into it, so personal and complex, i can't say anything intelligent about it other than it pulled me in, and that's rare. your images are filling my head ~~~
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| Like The Snow
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2023-12-02
i knew a ghost once
she disappeared
i wish she had not
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| Loom of the Land – Take 2
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2023-11-30
You're so close to writing blank verse with these two poems that I I wonder if you might give it a try, if it would work for you.
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| The song of freedom
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2023-11-29
Yours poems bring a pleasant pause in my day, thank you~~~
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| The Great
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2023-11-27
You ask good questions. The answers are either very simple or very complicated.
How about: there are plenty of people who wish as you do, there are plenty of people who abhor war. But not enough. War seems to be as natural to mankind as procreation.
This is such a thoughtful take on the movie. Thank you. Beware of learning too much about your heroes.
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| Two Poems About the Same Heartbreak
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2023-11-27
We'd rather you did not die, it's such a permanent kind of thing.
Poem 1:
"If love can die, I want it not."
But you seem very much to want it.
Poem 2:
I hope you find what you're looking for.
~
I'm glad there is still a place for romantic poetry, it's becoming an endangered species. Bravo.
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| Ante-Meridian Verses on a Sleepless Night
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2023-11-27
Bravo for wit, Lord B's and yours.
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| My Last Duchess
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2023-11-27
https://www.wikiwand.com/en/My_Last_Duchess
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| Sunday Brunch at Dawett
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2023-11-26
Some think that writing should be as a Ouija board, the letters form the words, the words form the sentences, all without conscious thought. Maybe that works for some, there was a lot of that sort of thing in the 60's-70's. It seems like Arun is almost telling you that, don't think too much, just do it (as the god of commercialism, Nike, says).
Some think beauty comes from the struggle to find the words.
It's great to read your words again, words which are thoughtful and elegant.
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| Sunday Morning
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2023-11-25
Why just one Sunday?
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| Pi, Euler's Number (e), and the Square Root of Two
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2023-11-25
perhaps "transcendental" and "irrational" are why humans always come a little short of explaining the world as we see it ~~
i enjoy and appreciate this poem
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| i believe in ...
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2023-11-25
It's nice to know (from a previous poem) the genesis of this gentle poem.
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| Standing at the station.
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2023-11-23
It is a good analogy, one we use in our household, we say, "we're getting on the train." It's a way of looking at, and dealing with, the hard times.
Grand, of course, and spot on.
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| The W of writing
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2023-11-21
like so many of us on poetbay, we write because we must write, we cannot not write.
a beautiful ~meditation~on writing.
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| Realms
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2023-11-21
. . . i need someone to dot my t's and cross my i's . . .
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| Petty Vengeance
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2023-11-21
A ++
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| Nature
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2023-11-21
i love this waking from dream as cat, it's a warm and vivid image, the desert and colours—beautiful.
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| The Girl Who Cried Woolf
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2023-11-21
before i comment, is it woolf or wolf, a literary reference or not?
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| Writing
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2023-11-20
This reminds me of how I used to feel when lines for a poem would come to me, then I'd lose them when some distraction arose. Now I think the words are still out there, and sooner or later they will come together again in a poem. Or, not, it really doesn't matter, there are plenty of words waiting for a home.
I really enjoyed this ramble on poetry.
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| Cold
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2023-11-19
You care, and that's a beginning.
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| Brother, My Cup Is Empty
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2023-11-18
this is more like it—rhythm and beat, rhyme and slant rhymes, this one engages body and soul.
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| volcano
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2023-11-17
unfinished stories are the best
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| Dream
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2023-11-17
i've spent my life with horses, these are beautiful/troubling images, and, i understand black thoughts all too well.
i especially like the drifting-down-the-page flow of words.
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| The Fluffy dog (tanka)
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2023-11-17
the last two lines are amazing, i'm going to bookmark this, it's too good let go.
i want to see the Fluffy Dog!
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| habit and experience
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2023-11-17
interesting, but i doubt "doing nothing" is doing nothing, it's simply a different of "doing."
right.
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| medecine
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2023-11-17
the art of medicine is to make a healthy life, ending with a miserable, long, prolonged death-march.
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| Before
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2023-11-16
I know a Katie.
An entire life in five lines, or second-half of a life. Crisp and devastating.
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| Visions of Violent Deaths - Take 2
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2023-11-14
This reads like a silent film, in which you narrate over your series of doorways/events. It is subtle writing, my friend, compelling, vivid, real, engaging, thoughtful. Death lurks in the hallway like Frost's: The Demiurge's Laugh.
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| December drizzles
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2023-11-13
this is enticing. leaves that "ooze down" is an image i had never imagined.
now it is well-lodged in my consciousness.
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| Sunday Morning
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2023-11-13
I see colors as I read this, colors not quite of my world, and they are lovely.
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| A Winter Day
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2023-11-13
an idyllic day~~~
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| Writing
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2023-11-13
i read that introverts find it calming to write, or to dive into any creative endeavor. It helps defray the constant input of whatever is going on around you.
"Writing is untiring
and demanding"
~amen, i might add: rewarding~
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| To write
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2023-11-13
Indeed, what is inside must come out, my sentiments exactly.
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| Hasta Luego
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2023-11-13
A couple made in heaven, truly. Beautiful thoughts, Marie.
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| Hey
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2023-11-13
i know the feeling ~~~
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| Orpheus at a House Party
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2023-11-06
This is rich, a cornucopia of images to dwell on, and wordplay. Shoot,
“Dio
Nysus”
alone is worth the price of admission.
I love the story of O and E, just heartbreaking. What you’ve done with it . . . I just thought of the revelers, the suitors, in Odyssey’s hall, drunken louts. You created a frat party of revelers, though perhaps not louts, and plunked O right down in the middle of it.
Your ending is earthly, earthy. I am imagining O happy to return to wherever it was he had been. Sadly hungover, but stories to tell.
Poetry should be fun. At times. This makes my day, and it’s only 4:30 a.m. Bravo and thanks.
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| Smash Away, Sisters
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2023-11-05
You may be the first person to use the word smithereen as a verb.
It was a particularly uptight era. Fifty years earlier my great-great grandmother told my my great-grandfather to go find a mistress and "leave me alone."
Still, I'm with you.
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| Winter Haiku
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2023-11-04
It brings a chill to the soul.
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| Stiff cold wind of oh-dark-thirty
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2023-11-04
the romance of the road bumps up against stark reality
highly atmospheric
most relatable
thoroughly enjoyable
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| All My Heroes Are Junkies
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2023-11-03
You’ve done something interesting. Though written in third person, it’s natural to see the writer as narrator, which makes this a personal story. The subject is difficult, and from the narrator’s point of view should be emotionally charged, and written in particularly dramatic way. That isn’t the case. You, as writer, began with a rhythm and kept the same rhythm throughout. The piece is more powerful for the steady beat. The drama and the conflict are in the words, the words tell the story, rather than an emotive tone. The narrator has an objective eye. The combination of the narration’s style and the story itself, makes the telling that much more compelling, and real.
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| All My Heroes Are Junkies
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2023-11-03
ha! prose!
i shall read this later at my leisure
with
Great Expectations
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