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2012-01-20
Thanks for sharing, Emelén ! I hope to post my own text again soon ! :D
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| Human
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2011-11-03
bookmarked ! :)
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| THE PLIGHT OF THE HONEYBEE
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2011-11-03
This is wonderful ! I just have one critique in the following: So listen politicians,
as these creatures face demise,
for their fate is linked to ours and will
bring us to our knees.
"demise" and "knees" should rhyme according to the rest of your poem. If this is what you intended on, I understand. I just wanted to point this out. I know I'm guilty of it myself. Thank you for sharing !
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| "The Personification of Beauty Has Arrived"
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2011-10-24
And Still I Rise is a poem by Tupac
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| Its not you it's me
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2011-10-24
I'm trying to explore the two sided street of love again. I was in a relationship for 4 years and it wasn't going anywhere. It was him, and it was me. I wasn't loving myself fully because I put too much negative energy forth into trying to love him. All in all, this is what I reflect on when I read this piece. Thank you for sharing, nature.
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| Nothing else matters
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2011-10-24
It is like beauty in dissonance. I love this piece. Thank you for sharing your work !
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| I could feel him
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2011-10-24
I like the flow of this piece. My mind moved with it.
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| Jonaay
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2009-04-09
I'm wondering if this ending leaves the reader hanging? Do you, my readers feel a closure in this piece?
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| What is there behind
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2007-08-01
i really like this write. it sounds like something from the band Tool. it flows very well and it makes you ponder.
*bookmarked!*
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| let us be
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2007-06-25
=] I do like your poetry. You seem to have a good grab on what a relationship truly is made of. I suppose I'd go as far as to say you are wise. Anywho...Great write.
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| urge to merge
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2007-06-25
I really like the selections 3-5. Also how you parallelled the more than sex deal to the heavens and earth. It's just *sigh* wonderful how you put this all together. SPLENDID! >.<
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| You are the one
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2007-06-20
"If you love something you got to let it go, and if it comes back then it means so much more. And if it never does, at least you will know that it was something you had to go through to grow." Heather Headly
Very good way of showing this quote's truth. I like your writings.
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| Lost Love
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2007-06-20
wow. i'm bawling. thanks. i've been in a writing rut for some time now. i think you just inspired me.
thank you.
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| Love Like Suicide
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2007-06-17
Awe I like it lady ma'am. Cuz I was reading suicidal type poetry yesterday and it's kinda like...All suicidal people secretly hope someone cares enough to stop them.
*ehem* Richard. Too bad he doesn't love me enough to stop me from loving him. Seeing as that's the only suicide I'm committing..
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| second chance?
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2007-06-16
I'd write something along the lines of this...if I could. I'm too apethetic at the moment. It's a great poem though!
Bookmarkt!
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| Remember my last..
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2007-06-16
evanesence?
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| As Long as the Wind Blows
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2007-06-16
I'm bawling. Seriously. It's absolutely wonderful. Inspiring. Thank you for blessing me with such an amazing write.
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| Give up on me
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2007-06-16
wow just reread this. completely new meaning. it seemed like a new poem.
One of your lines you missed an "n" at the end of the word THEN.
I love this poem even more now.
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| Mirror
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2007-06-16
Gorgeous.
I love how it's suicidal but it sounds like you are talking to an old friend. Absolutely perfect.
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| I don't hate you...
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2007-06-10
I think you mean scent*. Besides that it was a great poem darlin. I feel ya.
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| Ten Thousand Reasons
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2007-06-10
Awe I know how it is lady. I know how it tis. *shakes fist at the heavens*
Darn them men. =D
Great poem!
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| The Rainbow of Her Reasons
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2007-06-10
Very nice poem it really opens my mind to my own feelings and why I hold on to certain things...it's very well written and easy to read!
*thumbs up!!*
*bookmarked of course*
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| Give up on me
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2007-05-26
It's great. I can completely relate. When you get so attached...you're so afraid they're gonna leave, you believe they will it's like 'JUST LEAVE ALREADY!'
ha it sucks ass when that happens.
One thing "And forgiven ever sin"
Every? or ever since? it seems a bit incomplete.
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| Recycle Me
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2007-05-26
Very good idea. Only one question..."untouched by none" it's a double negative which gives off the idea that it IS touched by everyone. I have a feeling you mean something of the nature of "pure, touched by none".
Something of the sort. It's a great poem tho.
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| Bite
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2007-05-26
aaha! Me too. I just got out of a relationship like that...I'd bite him...make him bleed sometimes...ha. He was atheist, and I a Catholic. It's silly. ^_^
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| My Heart's Passion
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2007-05-26
Beautiful miss Lady.
It's about to make me weep! Wonderful.
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| The other half
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2007-05-26
Brought tears to my eyes.
*sigh* ever-so-true...
Waiting seems pointless when it's right there in front of you.
I'd actually enjoy hearing more into why you wrote this poem and such.
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| Soulmates
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2007-05-26
Oh my goodness it's so simple. It's gorgeous. I love the way this poem doesn't only describe love, but it shows what love is supposed to be by the poems simplicity. It's just marvelous!
definate bookmark!
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| Leaving
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2007-05-26
wow. you are definately a woman with a deep mind. this should be published. really.
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| Until I find you
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2007-05-26
I can relate to your writings. Thanks for being a truly great poet!
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| What else am I supposed to do?
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2007-05-26
I love these types of poems...the essence of the poem is that of giving up almost, yet still having hope that your questions of "what to do" get answered.
It is as you said. Just a game.
Read "What Can I Offer Her" by Tupac Shakur. It's a similar story behind the poem and it's very well written.
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| Discovering Affection
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2007-05-26
ha isn't that how love is though? quite a struggle to get what was already there...
Indivituality has a point. I get what you mean but I actually had to read that line twice to get it.
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| Remember the Fallen
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2007-05-26
Not enough people acknowledge the soldiers...any soldier...in the military, on the streets even simply the soldiers who take on daily struggles such as single parents.
Your lyrics are great. You used "contrasting" so perfectly...
I bookmarked this just to let you know. =D
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| I Met Him In A Dry July
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2007-03-21
Sorry if my questions are too personal. Is this a true story?
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| I Hate Poetry!
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2007-03-21
Very good poem! I am just as addicted. I'll get a book and won't stop reading it until it's done...poetry books I mean. It's a great poem. You explain the addiction rather than just SAYING you're addicted.
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| Possession
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2007-03-21
I like it. Kinda describes the disturbing feeling one may have when "making love". Very symbolic. I can read this poem in a couple different ways. I like it. a lot. =D
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| He Kissed Me In An Ardent March
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2007-03-21
You are very good with imagery. That's super good seeing as a lot of people have troubles with that! Don't you love to get inspiration from another poet? I think that's the main reason I'm on this site. =D
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| Beauty Fancied There
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2007-03-19
Very good poem. I like the imagery. Beautiful.
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| Soldier's Eyes
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2007-03-15
Thank your for the comment. I hadn't noticed them. Even though I read over the poem countless times, I never found those mistakes. Thank you.
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